Hey #mockpit folks, I’m loving these pitches! But I’m seeing a lot of what I call Xena pitches. A thread 1/?

Ever watched Xena: Warrior Princess?

I LOVED that show. And it had a pretty memorable intro—say it with me now

In a time of ancient gods, warlords and kings, a land in turmoil cried out for a hero. She was Xena, a mighty princess forged in the heat of battle. The power...the passion...the danger. Her courage will change the world.

Now it’s a great general overview, but it’s not the best pitch. What does it tell you about what Xena wants, about what’s standing in her way...really not all that much.

How can we reframe it?

See a very clunky first attempt of stuff compiled from Xena episodes l.

Haunted by her past as a ruthless warlord, Xena is determined to make amends for the death and destruction she’s reaped upon Greece. But when she steps in to protect a Grecian village from a new warlord, she’s framed by the war god as the village’s attacker.

It’s so important for us to understand who the MC is, what they want, who/what is standing in their way, etc. It’s hard as heck, but you can do it.

Watch out for the list:
A warrior princess with a sordid past
A war god who wants war etc.

Tell us what makes your story different! Have fun with it!

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