Too many hooks in your song. No character development if every moment has to be a climax.

Slow it down, my friend. Take me on a journey. I’m willing! I wanna travel with you. You don’t have to sell me anything!

I don’t want to know about the corporate agenda driving your aesthetic and sonic choices! I wanna be friends with you!

Show me your clumsiness. I dig it.

I retroactively dub this thread: thoughts while listening to the radio.