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HOW TO IMPROVE UPON CLAMP IN WONDERLAND: A THREAD
Clamp’s infamous part 3 doujin is immortalized by its homophobic undertones and its extreme deviations from the original JoJo. To make it more palatable to the general public, here’s some changes.
Clamp’s infamous part 3 doujin is immortalized by its homophobic undertones and its extreme deviations from the original JoJo. To make it more palatable to the general public, here’s some changes.
First and foremost, the only rule is I can’t edit the basic story, which is Kakyoin and Jotaro getting married and having a child named Jouta Kujo. This much cannot change. Everything else is fair game.
First up is Kakyoin being called “the wife.” New title is “the husband.” Kakyoin is a man and should be addressed as such. If this is gonna be a Jotakak doujin then they’re husbands.
Jotaro shouldn’t force Kakyoin into a marriage. They’re 17 and couldn’t even marry anyway; they’re too young. Time skip a few years to them in their twenties and then have them marry. Also make it not forceful and sudden. Imply they’ve dated or something so it’s not so sudden.
Cut the Kakyoin learning to cook scene. Kakyoin makes a whole breakfast in the death 13 arc so this seems irrelevant.
The Crusaders are visiting the Kujo house to celebrate the anniversary of defeating Dio. This gives them a reason to be there in the first place. Kakyoin offers to cook a meal for them, or maybe Holly does.
Dio is dead. Instead, some thug breaks into the house to steal breakfast, or maybe an enemy stand user. Also, have all the Crusaders fight them, not just Jotaro.
Defeat at the hands of bad cooking is lame. Have the Crusaders outsmart the opponent and beat them in a fight.
Defeat at the hands of bad cooking is lame. Have the Crusaders outsmart the opponent and beat them in a fight.
Part 2 of chapter 1 is... suspicious. From what I can infer Jotaro and Kakyoin have sex and everyone else spies on them via hermit purple for no good reason. I’m gonna say cut this altogether. Makes me uncomfy.
Chapter 2 comes around and instead of some random egg we have a time skip. Joot and Kak are now DIU age and have invited the Crusaders over to introduce their child Jouta Kujo. Jouta is a result of co-parenting with another woman so there’s no... egg. Maybe he’s adopted.
No domestic violence is used to discover Charmy Green. Maybe jouta sneezes and a tentacle pops out and Jotaro and Kakyoin try to help him summon the whole stand afterward. Also have Jouta name Charmy Green himself. That just seems cute.
When Jouta and Josuke meet have Josuke be aged up a bit. If Jotaro and Kakyoin are DIU age when he’s a toddler then they’re SO age now, so age up Josuke appropriately. Alternatively, Josuke meets baby Jouta.
That’s it! Western audiences could swallow that easier, I think, and it’s less weird all around. This is subjective so if you prefer the original then I won’t fight that. Hopefully this is a bit nicer than the original though
